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the ocean floor, the twisted sea and
all the flying jacket bees, and all

the flying birds and he, the one who
caught the glint of spring, who laid

it on the downy dew, the crispy green
of May fescue, who saw the plans of built

up lights that burn to light a thousand
pools of dripping rain and puddles lay

on any given night or day, the brick by
brick, the mortar spread, the snap of sugar

sweetly felt, the brine that made it
through the cloud, the opus of the

everything, the great and wide, the heat
of flame, the sun in cold but sunny sky,

the sound of when a child laughs,
the opus of the everything
It's a practice in imagery, in capturing a feeling. I often get overwhelmed at everything and don't know how to say it, so I guess this is my crack at it.

It's one of those "jazz" moments when you're listening to the right song, on the right day, which all the right stimulus around you.

It has been so painfully long since I've been able to relax enough to just write a poem. I will admit, this one was forced - a long and hard labor.

Update 4/23/011 1:53 AM
My first ever DD! Amazing!
Here is my journal entry with a lot of thanking people and a longer blurb about it:[link]
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Given 2011-04-22
The suggester says, "It's the incredible building rhythm he's created through a rough-ish metre & internal rhyme. ~chadwood describes The Opus Of The Everything as being like a jazz moment, but it's more frantic than that; it's like a racing heartbeat trying to leap out of his chest." ( Suggested by Sperpy and Featured by nycterent )
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing rhythm and the way you build it up is fantastic. This most definitely deserved the DD that it got.
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JupitersStorm Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
:)
Very good!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012   Writer
Thanks!
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buildingclimber Featured By Owner May 24, 2011
congrats.
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:iconchadwood:
chadwood Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2011   Writer
thanks! (wow this is a long time coming reply)
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buildingclimber Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2011
I take a long time to keep up too ..no worries.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2011   Writer
:D
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eliriel Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I really like this. Added to favorites!

You said "I often get overwhelmed at everything and don't know how to say it" I can really relate to a lot to that. When I write poems it can be difficult for me to loosen up a little, come out of my box, and try out different styles... I seem to be too afraid of making mistakes and experimenting sometimes... At the very least, I know there can be a better, more interesting way to put into words how I feel... I might just not know that way yet. lol
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Firstly, I am so very humbled that you've added this to your faves and have taken the time to read and comment here.

Some of the best artists became great by upsetting the sensibilities of others. If you continue to write and write and write...and read and read and read, you will find that "better, more interesting way" that exists inside you, and release it!
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eliriel Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks for your thought-provoking response. :) I think you're right... if you want to get better at something, you need to keep doing it. I've been off and on about writing for the past few years, and I think that needs to change. Reading your poem was a real inspiration... it has real melodic rhythm that I really like, and brings itself together so well. Thanks for sharing it!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011   Writer
I'm very glad to hear that. Trust me if you're a writer you'll be writing it's inescapable.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
:clap: Congratulations!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thank you! :D
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hey... A DD!!!!
You go guy. :party:
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
A special thanks to you Ron, for being so encouraging and supportive.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Finding benifit in our dialoguing has been a mutual experience Chad. :sun:
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Zelinxia Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Fantastic beat you got there. It captures nature quite well and the internal rhyme solidifies the package. Well done, and congrats on the DD!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Honestly, I wasn't trying to do internal rhyme... it just felt right, I guess.
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Zelinxia Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
You're welcome. :) And it's interesting how it came out naturally like that.
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Quelythe Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love the chugging motor behind the words, the way the rhythm keeps driving forward through the entire piece. Congratulations on your DD!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thank you so much.

"chugging motor behind the words" what a great way to put that...I love it when poetic people comment on poetry! You have uplifted my day with your kind words.
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Quelythe Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy to hear so -- you're very welcome.
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KRaven42 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
It's quite a beautiful practice in imagery. I really, really love the effects of this piece... everything you describe is just beautiful, and I love the way the words sound together. Congratulations on the DD--it was very much well earned! ^^
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Ah! Shucks! You are too kind. I am really sobored by the DD and thank you so much for reading this and commenting.
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KRaven42 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is such a lovely piece. I'm just being honest. ;)
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musicmist Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
I like this a lot :D The picture your words portray is great :) And could you do me a favor by reading some of my poems? A lot of times, I've doubted whether they really are poems or just random thoughts of mine in poem. If you could do that, I thank you. Keep up the good work. Read my poem Photograph first. I think you'll like it a lot. :D
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
I will be happy to read some of your work and THANK YOU so much for kindly coming by here to read mine and comment.
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musicmist Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011
no prob :D
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SPAMkid Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, that is some dang excellent rhythm you've got there. Very well done!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thank you. It just kind of happened that way, but I'm definitely happy with how it turned out.

I wholeheartedly and deeply appreciate your time in reading this and commenting. You are excellent!
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verybluebird Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Wow, really wonderful way with words (geez, was THAT an alliteration or what?) and such beautiful imagery. Lovely poem to read on Earth Day. :peace:
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
This is by far the coolest Earth Day I've ever had. Thank you so much for coming by to read, it really means a lot to me.
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SentientNo6 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is wonderful. Even more so read aloud. :heart:
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Yes I like it read a loud as well. I have practiced for a long time, and can say a lot of things with words. But I can't tell you how much I appreciate your time in reading and commenting.
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SentientNo6 Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very much welcome.

Also, congratulations on the well-deserved DD. :heart:
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Gemdrop Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing rythm.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thank you so much for reading!
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Moonbeams Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Wonderfully rhythmic piece, and full of titillating imagery as well. I particularly liked the use of internal rhyme. It was the icing on the already deliciously layered cake for me. I think the ending works well; it's fitting.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thank you. The internal rhyme was almost accidental. What I mean is, I didn't begin writing this intending to do internal rhyme. It just felt right.

Your comment is wonderful and has totally uplifted me. I humbly appreciate your time and attention!
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thank you twitter lit friend!
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libelle Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   General Artist
:heart:
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
:) Thank you for reading!
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Sperpy Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist
ahhhhhh this is AH-MAZING, love the flow, it feels almost Howl-ish in the urgency, the lilting & building rhythm. Sounds great out loud, your line breaks are fantastic, the internal rhyme. Ohhhhh love this.

My only qualm is the first 'the opus of the // everything' - when read aloud, it disrupts the flow. I don't quite know how to explain it cos it fits your 8 syllable pattern. I think it's ending that pattern with a 2 syllable word, and the softness of the word's ending. Does that make sense

Anyway, this is delightful. Made me happy
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Sperpy Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist
or, back on the line, perhaps it wants for an internal rhyme. That would work nicely in the lead up to the end.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011   Writer
IT could be - I think you for the suggestions and for commenting and for reading!

I think the bottom line is this is imperfect... and I have a weird ting about leaving things imperfect. A statement? Perhaps.
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Sperpy Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist
but everything else is so perfect. You can get away with the final line, the repeat of "opus of everything' as it is, just the first use of that line could do with tweaking. Anyway, it's a minor point
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
You! You suggested me to the admins for featuring! *a toast to you* This made my day.
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Sperpy Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2011  Hobbyist
you are very welcome :)
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice. I like how your rhymes are woven into the body of the piece. :heart:
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