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the ocean floor, the twisted sea and
all the flying jacket bees, and all

the flying birds and he, the one who
caught the glint of spring, who laid

it on the downy dew, the crispy green
of May fescue, who saw the plans of built

up lights that burn to light a thousand
pools of dripping rain and puddles lay

on any given night or day, the brick by
brick, the mortar spread, the snap of sugar

sweetly felt, the brine that made it
through the cloud, the opus of the

everything, the great and wide, the heat
of flame, the sun in cold but sunny sky,

the sound of when a child laughs,
the opus of the everything
It's a practice in imagery, in capturing a feeling. I often get overwhelmed at everything and don't know how to say it, so I guess this is my crack at it.

It's one of those "jazz" moments when you're listening to the right song, on the right day, which all the right stimulus around you.

It has been so painfully long since I've been able to relax enough to just write a poem. I will admit, this one was forced - a long and hard labor.

Update 4/23/011 1:53 AM
My first ever DD! Amazing!
Here is my journal entry with a lot of thanking people and a longer blurb about it:[link]
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The suggester says, "It's the incredible building rhythm he's created through a rough-ish metre & internal rhyme. ~chadwood describes The Opus Of The Everything as being like a jazz moment, but it's more frantic than that; it's like a racing heartbeat trying to leap out of his chest." ( Suggested by Sperpy and Featured by nycterent )
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing rhythm and the way you build it up is fantastic. This most definitely deserved the DD that it got.
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JupitersStorm Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012
:)
Very good!
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2012   Writer
Thanks!
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buildingclimber Featured By Owner May 24, 2011
congrats.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2011   Writer
thanks! (wow this is a long time coming reply)
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buildingclimber Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2011
I take a long time to keep up too ..no worries.
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chadwood Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2011   Writer
:D
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eliriel Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
I really like this. Added to favorites!

You said "I often get overwhelmed at everything and don't know how to say it" I can really relate to a lot to that. When I write poems it can be difficult for me to loosen up a little, come out of my box, and try out different styles... I seem to be too afraid of making mistakes and experimenting sometimes... At the very least, I know there can be a better, more interesting way to put into words how I feel... I might just not know that way yet. lol
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chadwood Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Firstly, I am so very humbled that you've added this to your faves and have taken the time to read and comment here.

Some of the best artists became great by upsetting the sensibilities of others. If you continue to write and write and write...and read and read and read, you will find that "better, more interesting way" that exists inside you, and release it!
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eliriel Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks for your thought-provoking response. :) I think you're right... if you want to get better at something, you need to keep doing it. I've been off and on about writing for the past few years, and I think that needs to change. Reading your poem was a real inspiration... it has real melodic rhythm that I really like, and brings itself together so well. Thanks for sharing it!
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